User blog comment:Troy168/The Ultimate Choice - Beta/@comment-26979215-20160112034646/@comment-1789139-20160112184810

Sorry with the late response, it was late when I received the message.

About me saying that I modified someone's work, I felt that I have to say it...otherwise someone would call me a fake and let others know that I stole someone's work, and even if it didn't happened in the first beta, it could happened later down the road which could hurt my creditibility, and if the original creator of that story shows up and tells me about it, I would let him know and would apologize about it, but I can tell you that no money was exchange.

And proof reading could help...since I tried to make things work without the sentence feeling odd at somepoints, as for the monolog, I have yet figgure out the town's name yet, and the location yet so it could take some time before the monolog feels natural...

As for the H-scene, I can understand why there's too many flashes, so maybe I'll trin down the dialog a bit and remove a couple of flashes...

And I appreciate your critique, as I say before, every bit help is welcome on making this side story.