Talk:War of the Goddesses/@comment-122.106.22.46-20130109090946

The animation are pretty astounding. Although I don't quite like the idea of the Luke-Ichigo sprite. You should've made your own Luka sprite, instead of just photoshopping the head into Ichigo's body... but that's not a big deal (although sometimes it does make me cringe looking at it). Anyway, I noticed the script mostly consists of dialogues and that use of (*) to describe actions... eg *crying* makes it sound really bland and simplistic. Instead of "I could feel the tears swelling up in my eyes and trickling down my cheeks as the words of my mother embraced my heart", you reduced it to "*crying*". Even though I think you aimed for an emotional story that appeals to the audience, the use of * isn't really effective for it. I'm not sure how experienced you are in story writing but that's just my critique. I was really astounded by the animation and graphical quality of your work though, so I think what you're lacking now is just more "impact" in the script. I'm looking forward to the next episode!